Revising part 2

I just met with Professor Scott, and it helped me a lot.  I understand better how I can actually improve my proposal and have a few different ideas on how to forward my work.  I'm finding it hard because I keep presenting material rather than talking about what I plan to research.  Since my field is education, there is already a lot of information on this subject out there, which makes it hard for me to make my topic original.  I do definitely have a better feel for ways to improve my proposal though.  I want to address the American Educational Research Society and describe Blacksburg High School to them.  I also need to address what I want from them and maybe put a timeline for my "research"? In my Plan of Action section, I need to be more specific as well.  Thanks for all the help today Ms. Scott!