Response to the Corrections made to my Research Proposal

I received a lot of guidance in the revisions that Professor Scott made. In my proposal, I decided to ask for research rather than money, because I don't really need money in order to research my small community. However, I wasn't being specific enough about which type of research I needed, so I think I will try to fix that. I also was being too vague with the problem I was addressing. When I was talking about the "new society", I was basically referring to the more diverse classrooms because I feel that diversity leads to student's being able to express their difference in opinions and beliefs rather than one right way to do everything. However, I probably should focus my research question more so that the reader understands what I mean by "new society".

Some of the more organizational issues that I plan to fix are the way that I put information into different sections. When writing the proposal, I used the method of just writing what I thought was necessary and then sort of sectioning it off in a way I thought made sense. However, I think some of my information belongs elsewhere. For example, I was a little unsure of what was supposed to go in the objectives section, and Professor Scott clarified that for me. Lastly, I plan on fixing my References section, because I am using MLA format, which I did not correctly follow the guidelines for. All of these suggestions will definitely benefit my proposal and make it more focused and appropriate.